55 Fiction -1
This is my very 1st attempt at 55 fiction. I hope that it comes out bearable and ok if not good. I am so used to writing lengthy posts that this feels kinda weird. As I said, this is my 1st attempt so constructive criticism is welcome.
New Journey
Relief floods over my body,
Finally this is all over.
No more tears, pain, hurt and yelling.
I am going to move on and embark on a new journey.
My heart seems to take the cue and relaxes.
I smile and then I am gone.
Guria
First one??!! Beautiful! one of the best 55-ers I have ever read!! It's a 'Wow!'!!
Gyanban
I quite liked the choice of words,I think they conveyed a sense of resignation pretty beautifully…
Ash
This one is really really brilliant.
blunt edges
pretty cool 4 a first timer 😀
wish all new beginnings were this easy!
Urvashi
for the first attempt..really a nice work.. !! 🙂
Ashley
Amazing! Could picture everything….Loved this one. 🙂
Neha
it is simply wow..really a nice one..
kanagu
beautiful one Harini… 🙂 🙂
write more of these.. 🙂 🙂
Kay
nicely done! if only it all could just be whisked away!…until that last line…poof! brilliant